Tuesday, February 9, 2010

Tj

October 17, 1994, that is an important day in my life even though I was to yet born. This day means a lot to my life because it is the day my brother, Tj, was born. I admire Tj, he’s my big brother and I feel like he can help me, and I can learn a lot from him. He has many faults, but who doesn’t? He isn’t always nice to me, and I don’t like him at times, but there’s a lot I can learn from him and I think there is a lot to like about him too.
One thing I find admirable is how responsible he is. He always does his homework right when we get home, and that’s something I could use some help on. He rarely loses things, or forgets to do something. His grades aren’t always great, but he also has some pretty hard classes. Around his friends he doesn’t always act smart, but when it comes to getting things done, he always does great. He doesn’t always want to admit it, but he is very smart, and very responsible. He always puts his homework ahead of his friends. I feel like I really need to work on these skills, and I admire him very much for being so responsible, and being a good example for me.
Another very admirable quality about him is that he is dedicated. He works out and trains every day after school and even on weekends. He dedicates all his free time into sports, mainly baseball, and school. I think I could really learn from this, because I always put my friends and having fun ahead of anything else. In the summer he rarely has time to hang out with anyone, except his friends from the baseball team. He dedicates his entire summer, and now his free time after school in the winter, all for baseball. At least he has something he loves so much that he will dedicate all his time to be the best at it.
The final thing I admire the most about him is the way he can entertain people, and he is a very good people person. He likes to talk, and he is not at all shy, he is also very funny, and rarely boring. I don’t consider my self shy or boring, but I do consider him a little more fun to be around. He always makes me laugh, even if its for something very stupid. All I know is I don’t get bored around him. He likes to talk about anything, and he will try to keep himself and others easily entertained. He doesn’t need to be with his friends or constantly doing something to be happy; he can just keep him self entertained. I admire how it’s so easy for him to make people laugh, and keep them happy.
There are a lot of things I admire about him, but these are just the main reasons. We fight a lot and he isn’t always the nicest, but that doesn’t mean he isn’t admirable. I love Tj, and think he is a great person and sets a good example for me. He is a great brother, and October 17, 1994 was a great day for me because he came into my life.

6 comments:

  1. this reminds me a lot of both of my brothers. if this was my RD I would look at the last paragraph. you use the word brother four times, so I'd try to find another way. Like instead of brother say Tj. Nice job though, it's good.

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  2. It was good and i admire how much you look up to your brother and how much he is a great example for you. It's good to have a role model in your life. I think you did a good job, but i have to agree with jordan, you did use brother a lot. If this were my paper, I would change that. Other than that, great job. :)

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  3. I really like how you write as if it were one of your friends because it makes it easier to connect with the essay. What does Tj stand for because my sister's name is Cj and it stands for Cassandra Jeanine so I was wondering. If this were my paper I would try to find more words. Your essay repeats in the end. I know how hard it is to find other adjectives.

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  4. I really liked your last paragraph because it described all the things you said about your brother and really made the story end nicely. My question is, how can your brother come into your life when you weren't even born yet? Just kidding. If this were my paper I would keep it exactly this way because it was really good.

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  5. I really enjoyed reading this, I thought it was very well written. I have a brother myself, but I don't get along with him as you seem to do. I also agree with what everyone else said. What does TJ stand for?

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  6. okay i have to admit, i don't get along so well with tj, and i think jenny and sarah knew this.:) Thank you for all your nice comments, and ways to improve my paper. ANd because you asked it stands for thomas robert frericks jr. so thomas junior, because my dad's name is tom. Jenny, i thought you knew that:)
    thanks!:)
    -katie:)

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